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Post by Joey Lazarus on Jan 31, 2023 21:39:08 GMT -5
This week we tried to do a lot... And it made us late. Hopfully the show was still able to live up to expectations! We tried to ensure there were potential storyline beats throughout the show - Our intention is for you all to decide where your character goes next! - while progressing the 'Fed wide' storyline. We had something in store for Laz which we decided to pull due to how much was happening, this will now be split between this weeks Talkin' Crude to encourage further progress and attention there, and the main point on War-Zone 03. Based off of feedback received we made some tweaks to layout and graphics (Darkening crowd to help the focal points stand out) Any feedback on War-Zone 02 and other suggested tweaks will be greatly appreciated!
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Post by "The Paragon" Greg Salazar on Jan 31, 2023 21:41:01 GMT -5
Might do more later, but a big thank you for my match... and following the strat/spots I submitted. Big thumbs up from me.
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Post by Joey Lazarus on Jan 31, 2023 21:55:32 GMT -5
Might do more later, but a big thank you for my match... and following the strat/spots I submitted. Big thumbs up from me. Thank you for the suggestion of using them. When I read that spot the entire match instantly came together in my head. I will be making a thread later requesting submissions from everyone - i think it'll help ensure your character tells the story you all want them too.
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Post by Vox Falconis on Feb 3, 2023 10:50:19 GMT -5
I always think it's great that the commentators briefly pick up what's happening and then do a card review. So far this team is working very well. And very well solved with spectators as background in these pictures.
When I saw the picture of Ken Howard, my first thought was Fred from Scooby-Doo. đ
And now he's fighting Abraham Lincoln. I love these little pop culture shoutouts, please keep it going. Mysterion is still high on my favorites list, only challenged by Lucha Dino. Yeah, the result was unfortunately to be expected, even if it was pleasantly surprising due to the count-out.
I always read âCream of Crapâ when Cameron Creed is announced. My mind is too dirty (sigh). Anyhow, I like how you keep the details consistent here: Eric and the ref are out and safe before green thing comes out. Those details really enhance the show.
It's just a pity that the second match was again decided by the absence of the player, but whatever. I didn't like Ultimate Destroyer anyway, so that's it.
The commercial made me laugh, great!
Whaaaat, I got an extra picture for my segment? Very cool and I hope the segment was a nice little addition to this show and didn't bother you.
I find the scene with Maverick (âTop Gunâ Maverick -yeah how originalâŚ) a bit strange. His bio says he's a heel. But here he behaves like an absolute face and hands out... T-shirts. Well, let's see what else comes from him in next week.
Whatâs up with yâall with weird ripoffs? Wendi as a little girl, and it's not even on a Wednesday... but well, at least a creative approach with DemoniK and Wendi as whole unit, even if it's absolutely questionable with the 8-year-old girl appearing onstage... I think little kids have no business in wrestling, especially when violent actions are common in the CWF.
The match is suitably short and I don't think it was a big surprise that DemoniK was the winner. But it's good that you use the momentum here to build him up as a threatening opponent, also well used with a little speech from Wendi. Still takes a lot of getting used to.
Then a segment from my opponent Tetsuo Oni. Is it a coincidence that we just wrote both segments of the show? I like that his focus is clearly on the main event rather than our match. It might have been nice if the commentators commented on such segments. Because now it sounds a bit like Eddie and Ben just ignore such scenes.
I am very satisfied with the Ravenna versus Tetsuo match, because the amateur background of Ravenna's ring style was clearly noticeable here. That's what I wanted to read, thumb up! I can also live very well with the result, because I have to be honest - the handler is definitely top-notch, I guess. Especially since the result can be easily integrated into Vandenberg's rookie character. Further I'm pleasantly surprised that the match is quite balanced.
Valor-O-Dactyl? Tiranosaurio as father of Dino? I love those guys. Well mostly Dinosaurio because Union Jack is bit too much sexist prick for me. However, I loved how this 10 Questions piece with Alyssa Lucchi ended. Had to chuckle here.
Then the tag team match and I'm starting to warm up for this feud between Tarrasque and Tex Altwater. The match itself had some surprising twists and was quite exciting to read! Good co-main event.
Trumpelweizer. ROFL! So far the best ad I've seen in the Efed world. It absolutely made my day.
So now the Main Event⌠and it's HUGE! This leads me to believe that the match alone is longer than the rest of the show. Whoever wrote this definitely needs a medal for it. Actually, why not MotW? Anyway I don't believe that the thing between Donzig and CJ Walker won't picked up in next show.
In the summary, Iâm quite happy with War-Zone #2 and all little improvements to make the show more and more harmonious. And I like that Eddie Vegaâs heel commentary has toned a little bit down which works much, much better into the showâs general tone.
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